Question

近幾年來，中國的中學(xué)生出現(xiàn)了“出國留學(xué)熱”。成千上萬的中學(xué)生已經(jīng)去國外學(xué)習(xí)，而另外一些學(xué)生也一直在設(shè)法出國，對此人們有不同的看法，請根據(jù)下面的表格內(nèi)容，以Studying Abroad”為題寫一篇短文。

優(yōu) 點	缺 點
1．與不同文化背景的人交朋友。 2．更快地學(xué)習(xí)外語。	1．年紀(jì)小，缺乏生活經(jīng)驗，自理能力差。 2．生活和學(xué)習(xí)費用高。

作文要求：
不能照抄原文，不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校真實的名稱和學(xué)生的真實姓名。
語句連貫，詞數(shù)80個左右。作文的題目和開頭已給出，不計入總次數(shù)。
Studying Abroad
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular with Chinese high school students,
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Answer 1

Studying Abroad
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular with Chinese high school students, but I don’t think it’s the only way to achieve success. Every coin has two sides. First of all, studying abroad can make us improve our foreign language quickly. Secondly, we can make friends with the people who are from different countries. Thirdly, we will learn a lot about the culture of other countries.
On the other hand, it will bring a lot of problems to study abroad. For example, some students are too young to look after themselves well. And the cost of studying abroad is very high. It will bring a heavy burden to the family. So when you want to study abroad, you must think it again and again.

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們就時下比較熱門的話題，即出國熱發(fā)表一下看法。表格中為我們列好了出國學(xué)習(xí)的優(yōu)點和缺點。我們需要用正確、精煉的語言將其表達(dá)出來。故這篇作文我們可以分兩個層次寫。開頭已經(jīng)寫好，點名了主題。接下來我們可以從優(yōu)點和缺點兩個方面來論述。這樣整個文章的結(jié)構(gòu)大體出來了。通過審題可知，這篇短文應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時和一般將來時、第三人稱來寫。寫作時還要注意語句的連貫及表達(dá)的流暢。
【亮點說明】這篇范圍是比較優(yōu)秀的。首先它的層次很分明，共有兩段，按照對待出國熱這個事情的優(yōu)點和缺點進(jìn)行劃分。其次這篇短文意思完整，要點全面。文章中包括了題目中的所有要點，意思完整。另外，這個短文表達(dá)流暢，有節(jié)奏。文章中注意使用不同的句型，如but I don’t think it’s the only way to achieve success、Every coin has two sides、we can make friends with the people who are from different countries、On the other hand, it will bring a lot of problems to study abroad、some students are too young to look after themselves well等。