Question

書(shū)面表達(dá)。
李雷和他的同學(xué)要到圓山去春游。因?yàn)榇禾焓桥郎降淖詈脮r(shí)候。天氣好，即不會(huì)太冷也不會(huì)太熱。李雷和他的同學(xué)騎自行車去圓山，結(jié)果在路上，李雷拐錯(cuò)了彎，發(fā)生了交通事故，傷到了右腿。所以說(shuō)遵守交通規(guī)則對(duì)于我們來(lái)說(shuō)非常重要。 我們平時(shí)必須遵守 交通規(guī)則。 1. 注意交通燈。紅燈停,綠燈行。  2.不要騎得太快，應(yīng)該靠右邊行。3. 騎車要小心，戴頭盔。 4. 不能違反交通規(guī)則， 否則會(huì)被罰款。

Answer 1

How to obey the traffice rules
Li Lei and his classmates wanted to go to Mount Yuan for the spring field trip.
Because spring is the best time to climb mountains. The weather is very fine. It’s not too cold and not too hot. Li Lei and his classmates decided to go there by bike. But on the way, Li Lei made a wrong turn, and a traffice accident happened. Li Lei’right leg was hurt.( His classmates had to send him to the hospital.) So it’s very important for us to obey the traffice rules. First, when the lights turn red, we must stop. When the lights turn green, we can cross the road. Second, we shouldn’t ride too fast and we should ride on the right of the road. Third,we should always be careful and wear bicycle helmets when we ride bikes. Fourth, if we break the traffice rules, we’ll get a fine.

試題分析：本文首先對(duì)李雷和他的同學(xué)選擇春季去旅游的事情進(jìn)行講述，說(shuō)明春季旅游的好處。然后，對(duì)李雷由于忽視了交通規(guī)則，拐錯(cuò)了彎而傷到了右腿的事進(jìn)行敘述。最后，從四個(gè)方面說(shuō)明遵守交通規(guī)則的重要性，在四個(gè)方面的敘述中注意邏輯上的條理性，可以利用First, Second, Third, Fourth來(lái)增強(qiáng)文章的可讀性。
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