Question

20．假設(shè)你是李明．上周日你班舉行了一次畢業(yè)聚會(huì)．請根據(jù)以下提示，給你的英國筆友 Robert 寫一封郵件，向他描述聚會(huì)的情況及談?wù)勀惝?dāng)時(shí)的感受．

要求：1．語句通順，意思連貫，語法正確，書寫規(guī)范；
2．必須包含所給提示，并做適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
3．行文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)人名、校名或地名；
4．詞數(shù) 80左右．（郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）
Hi Robert，
We had a graduation party last Sunday．…Long before 3：00 pm，all the s tudents in my class couldn't wait to come to the hall．Our teachers and parents were invited to the party，too．First，ourmonitor made a speech．He thanked our teachers and parents sincerely．Next，we gave presentsto each other．The most exciting moment was the show time．We sang，danced and played games．Our English teacher told a story which made us all laugh．Everyone was so happy．I think the wonderful party will always be in my mind．
Do you have such a party？Please write soon．
Yours，
Li Ming．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇應(yīng)用文，讓我們根據(jù)圖片內(nèi)容寫一描述畢業(yè)晚會(huì)的郵件，內(nèi)容是開放的，需要我們發(fā)揮自己的想象力、創(chuàng)造力和思維力，把這些內(nèi)容補(bǔ)充完整．由題目可知，寫作時(shí)要用第一、三人稱，時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般過去時(shí)，內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)包括：聚會(huì)情況以及當(dāng)時(shí)的感受．
重要短語及高分句型：
have a graduation party
舉行一次畢業(yè)聚會(huì)
give presents to each other
互送禮物
tell a story
講故事
Long before 3：00 pm，all the students in my class couldn't wait to come to the hall．
下午三點(diǎn)前很久，我班所有的學(xué)生就迫不及待地來到大廳．long before在…前很久，can't wait to do sth．迫不及待地做某事，兩個(gè)短語用得好．
Our English teacher told a story which made us all laugh．
我們的英語老師講了一個(gè)讓我們所有人發(fā)笑的故事．tell a story講故事，make sb．do使得某人做某事，make使動(dòng)用法，后跟不帶to的不定式．which made us all laugh是定語從句，作story的定語．
First，our monitor made a speech．
首先，我們的班長做了一個(gè)演講．first這個(gè)連接詞用得好，make a speech做演講，是重要短語．

解答 One possible version：
Hi Robert，
    We had a graduation party last Sunday．Long before 3：00 pm，all the students in my class couldn't wait to come to the hall．（高分句型）Our teachers and parents were invited to the party，too．First，our monitor made a speech．（高分句型）He thanked our teachers and parents sincerely．Next，we gave presents to each other．The most exciting moment was the show time．We sang，danced and played games．Our English teacher told a story which made us all laugh．（高分句型）（聚會(huì)情況）Everyone was so happy．I think the wonderful party will always be in my mind．（當(dāng)時(shí)的感受）
Do you have such a party？Please write soon．
 
                                                               Yours，Li Ming

點(diǎn)評 寫應(yīng)用文時(shí)，首先要看懂圖畫所表達(dá)的內(nèi)容，最好列一下提綱，然后根據(jù)提綱進(jìn)行寫作就不會(huì)造成離題或偏題，但要注意，文章必須要覆蓋整個(gè)要點(diǎn)，行文要注意簡化，不要拖沓冗長，要使用正確的句子，同時(shí)注意，要使用一定的連接詞，比如：first，second，what's more，finally等．再者，在作文完成時(shí)要注意檢查、修改，如果有時(shí)間可以先寫到草稿紙上，再抄到答題紙上，這樣更容易得高分．最后，注意使用一些句型和短語，使整篇文章意思連貫、流暢，方能成就一篇好的作文．